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I’m going to introduce you four good places in Kumamoto.
There is a lake in Kumamoto city called ezuko. I think most of citizens of Kumamoto city are know it. It is near youme town Hamasen. If you want to relax, I recommend you go to ezuko. You can play with water, sitting in shade. There are many children, so you also play with them. There is a small café near the water and you can rest there.
In the night, I recommend you to go to Mt.Kinpo. You can watch very beautiful night view on the top of the mountain. Some people say that the best place to see the night view is Mt.Hanaoka. I like there too, but I think Mt.Kinpo’s is more beautiful because the mountain is higher than Mt.Hanaoka. If you have free time in a night, you should go to Mt.Kinpo.
By the way, do you know “shichifuku manju”? It’s a kind of Japanese manju. It have introduced on TV. There are many tastes such as chocolate, custard cream, ham egg, yogurt and so on. The shape is raccoon dog and delicious cream in it. The shop is in Asoda near the Self-Defense Forces of Kita Kumamoto. It is small shop that you might miss it, but I want you to find it and try delicious manju.
At last, I’ll write about Minamata. The city is famous for the big problem of pollution disease. But, I think the city is good for visit. I recommend you to go to “yunoko” beach. It is good for swimming and you can use a small spa after swimming. After washing your body, you should go to “Fukuda Noujo”near the beach. It is a small shopping town selling jam or wine made by Minamata’s farm products. They are for souvenirs. Minamata city has many good places to visit expect I wrote.
I wrote these four places in Kumamoto, but I want to know much more good places. I want to go around Kumamoto in this summer vacation. (334/7157)

Essay2 (before correcting)

My treasure is the wallet. The wallet is emerald green, oblong, made of leather. It is very easy to use and I’m using it for about 3 years. I still like it very much. The reason why the wallet is my treasure is it’s the last present from my grand mother. She passed away 3 years ago because of the cancer of pancreas. I really liked her.
One summer day when I was a high school student, she asked me “Do you have something what you want?” She lived alone before her cancer was discovered, but she stayed at my family a few months before she died. “Well, I want to buy a new wallet” I answered. ”Then, she gave me some money and said “You may buy a new wallet using this money. I want to go out with you, but I can’t.” I was sad to hear that, but I thought I have to buy a new one to make ease her.
I went to Tsuruya on the weekend and bought the wallet of Annasui. The design is simple and color is beautiful, so I thought she also like it. When she looked it, she admired the beautiful green. I was glad that she liked my choice.
After a few months later, she got worst. She had lived longer than her remaining days that the doctor told, but she died six months later the informing. She also wanted to buy a new yukata for me, but the wish didn’t come true. So I think I have to more cherish the last present. I’m going to keep use the wallet the moment it was broken. (274/6823)

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About Chihiro Onitsuka

Last night, I wrote about Chihiro Onitsuka's new song. Then I want you to know about her so I'll introduce her biography. 

Her name is Chihiro Onitsuka and it is her real name. She is from Miyazaki, Nichinan. Her birthday is October 30 and she is 28 years old now. She was a captain of track and field club in her junior high school. That's very surprising, I think. She went to Nichinan high school, but she wanted to be a singer so she didn't go to school in 3rd grade. After graduation of high school, she had an audition and passed it. She became a singer song writer like this.

Now many people think she doesn't sing , but she is going to release a new song on July 22th! I can't wait it...! (134/6547)

beautiful new song!

Hello! Long time no see...
When I was watching You Tube as a rest of writing a report, I found a new movie. It was Chihiro Onitsuka's new song's movie!! The song's title is "Kaerimichi wo Nakushite", in English "Missing the return road". It was a slow but passionate song. I was amazed listening to the song. I was also surprised at the beauty of Chihiro Onitsuka. I conviced that she was completely back to her fans, so I'm really expecting her new songs. (84/6143)

⑬Vacation plans

I have a lot of things to want in summer vacation! Last summer, I have driving school classes so I can't do many things. This summer, I want to go to spa for example Kurokawa spa or Hirakawa spa. I don't like to go to crowded place. I like to relax in nature better than go to any theme parks. I want to go to countryside, enjoy nature and soak in the hot spring. After that, I eat delicious meal! It's one of the plans which I'm thinking about summer vacation. I'll talk about it to my boyfriend and plan concretely before the beginning of the vacation. (108/6329)

⑫About Bloging

I have never written any blogs since I made my blog for writing class. Now, I have to write the blog, but it's very difficult for me! I'm not good at the things that I have to keeping. I can't plug, but I don't want to fall writing class so I write my blog when I go out or have some events. I always take pictures and put them into my blog. The blog which only have words is so boring for readers and writer, myself. I want to try writing more interesting blog. (95)

Essay Script

I'll introduce about Mt.Kinpo. It is the highest mountain in Kumamoto city. I recommend you the night view that watching from top of the mountain! It is very beautiful. Some poeple say the best beautiful night view is that watching from top of the Mt.Hanaoka, but I don't think so. Mt. Kinpo is higher than any other mountains in Kumamoto city, so the night view is wonderful. The approach to the top of the mountain is under the Honnou temple and you can reach the top about 15 minutes.If you have a free time in the night, go to Mt.Kinpo! (101/6126)